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not bad, but a little too raw. I mean, I'm not
criticizing myself personally, I can't
do it, but instead of shortening the
syllables, you should have worked a little harder on
the consonances. But in any case I
like it, just like all your
poems :):):):):) gone kisses and see you +
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it is a disease,
which gives me none
respite,
she worries me,
but
I can't help myself,
there
dive back,
I don't think it's tomorrow
the day before,
that I will come back without
bottle,
I would like so much to be able to
pass,
and live in the
sobriety
if only i accepted
your departure, diane,
things would be
simpler,
you were there
first,
who gave himself to me,
and
I can't live without you
five
years have passed,
I did not succeed in
forget you,
I suffer in
silence,
I have no luck,
it is
for this reason,
that I suffer at my
way and with my drink.
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